At first I wasn't unsure what to think of this idea, but
the more I thought about it, the more I saw opportunities
within. First of all there’s your desired cast, which seems
pretty good (Cusack is usually good in anything), but there
could also be an adventurous journey that Reign of Fire
failed to accomplish. You could really have fun developing
the mood surrounding the presence of the beast that’s
somewhere out there, even though that’s partly a director’s
job; but building the suspense through the writing is the
first step in that process…if your intent is indeed
With Shia LaBeouf as the desired lead, you might want
to have comic relief, as he seems to have a gem of a sense
of humor, as far as his presence on HBO’s Project Greenlight
suggested. And blending in the mystery of the beast with
this comedic side can help create a balance in moods, sort
of like the mix of horror/suspense and silliness in Sleepy
Hollow (with Johnny Depp being the naïve character reacting
to the wild incidents, loosening things up).
Kudos to the author of this pitch: what I like is that
he or she didn’t go into too much detail, while giving the
gist of the story. Similar to that of a good trailer, enough
is exposed to get you interested but nothing more than that.
However, this being a pitch – inclusive of beginning,
middle, and end – I think a bit more could have been added
to give the story its meat.
LaBeouf and Cusack are good choices for a pairing. If
the author revises his or her pitch, I suggest that a genre
(Horror? Thriller? Mystery?) is determined for an indication
of what audiences should expect.